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you have a beautiful mind

i peer through your windows
from the safety of my darkness
in awe of the light and laughter
that i see
it doesn’t bother me the least bit
the cobwebs in the corners of the panes of glass
or in the corners of your ceilings
nor the fine layer of rain-delivered dust
which hazes the panes, dulls the pain
the dust which collects upon the things you have collected
and set aside
i still marvel at the beauty
i still find wonder in seeing all the broken
and forgotten toys
and in contemplating your play and how you must have imagined yourself
when you were playing
i see your shadow through gauzy curtain
your light obscured
then a flash of clarity as you pass between the folds of fabric
i would push upward and climb through
to come tell this all to you
but the latch is locked
there’s no engraved invitation in my mailbox
and i know
through the front door is always the better way
to come home

~Drake Lightle

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The following comments are for "you have a beautiful mind"
by DeletedUser

beautiful mind

there's a stealthy, cautious tone to this and the observations are speculative, meditative, measured, images full of apt introspection... I liked this a lot, called to mind watching the self, looking through a long lens in to the past, searching for a way back... though there are, as is common with your pieces, many possible interpretations... but that's the one I'm going with 'cause it appeals to me best.
nicely textured poem, this, and the last three lines are stellar.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 18, 2006 )

Curtains drawn...
AMG, have you ever thought about teaching people how to read? Because no matter how well I think I've managed to bury the meaning in a thick shellack of possibilities, you somehow seem to find my head beneath the laquer.

( Posted by: DeletedUser [Member] On: November 18, 2006 )

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