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these thoughts make me itch like junk sickness / make me want to tie up find a vein and cotton-cloud oblivion / and that’s despite my needle phobia / needles just aren’t my stylus / but chemicals sure bring out the groove / I swear I see little black specks moving just beneath the surface of my skin / left to right / eating me like you’re reading me / consuming my mind matter / getting fatter on the blood pain / vicarious decay and gray pallor dullness is the hue / keeping it at a comfortable distance / yet uncomfortable and abrasive for the soft tissue / like sand-paper on the head / or perhaps the clit / raw and bleeding / what should be pleasure is pain / a solvent chemical wash / diluted feelings and delusional thoughts / greet me at every street corner with a ‘whatcha want, whatcha need’ / i breathe the urine-soaked dust which swirls in each doorway / deep into my lungs / choking on the toxicity and muddiness of the sustenance / gagging re-gurg-i-tat-ing and re-swal-low-ing yesterday’s dinner because it’s all there is to eat today / laughing at my reflection in the plate glass window / with the sign that says ‘closed’ / it’s prophetic, don’t you see / i could scratch scratch scratch right through my flesh / find the bones and dig into the marrow / let the blood spill into the paper cup / so i can finger paint and turn my body into a poetic device / a de-vise a means to de-vice myself of this psychic babble baggage / a quill a hollow shaft a well a scrawl / i’m not feeling so well yet so hollow so deep / maybe you could draw me out of me in a bucket or with a permanent marker / with butane burn my pupils / lay me bone by bone into the brick and mortar memories of you, yeah baby, of you / laying me one bone at a time / lay me bone me fuck me feverishly good / if you love me then maybe i’ll be your wall / the wall which you tag with your monkey moniker my moniker is DopeKing it’s just ‘dope’ with a crown on the ‘o’ / monkey see monkey do / never monkey with another monkey’s monkey / so tag, you’re it / no shit / here’s your invitation to tag my wall / the wall of the pen which confines you with the pen which defines you with the pen which reminds you that you are a swan / this is my song / giving up meaning into rhythm / into you deeper than you might have suspected / un-reflected un-de-flected utter-ly ab-sorbed / de-fracted light bending in your pupils / my-opic visions lead to in-decision un-decided kisses caresses fondled breasts and a chilling cup of empti-ness / warm wet and smoothly inviting yet / stealing blood from my brain so i’m feeling the cell tissue die with each pulsing thrust of each beat of my heart / as we sheet dance to un-written melo-dies and un-sung tunes the two of us / finding so-lace and sun-shine breaking between the cloud cover of this electric paper duvet / this could be wed-nesday’s weat-her fore-cast fore-play on the not-so-distant horizon / just might play out into some-thing with a little more soul than the soles of the shoes which were worn on the walk away / the soles which put the gas petal to the floor and sped that car off into dark-ness / leaving me a-lone and lonely / marinating in un-requited re-grets / as if life were some kind of test

~Drake Lightle

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The following comments are for "bugs under the skin"
by DeletedUser

sweet pain
It's like Lou Reed minus the skill.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 10, 2006 )

Glad you didn't like it...
...I'd be worried if you were appreciative of it. It wouldn't fit with my understanding of your weak mind.

( Posted by: DeletedUser [Member] On: November 10, 2006 )

I like it...I do I do....
lazer percision right on target...just like your other piece "the weakness of your mind".

( Posted by: dfortyeight [Member] On: November 10, 2006 )

versatile talent
dOpeking has entered my veins and I'm nodding in pleasure mellow for this fellow raises for me just me and her and her and her but I share with pleasure.

( Posted by: xxxtrinityxxx [Member] On: November 10, 2006 )

I ahve to disagree with Soos on this one. I quite enjoyed it. The separation of syllables in the last few verses gave it an interesting rhythm. Nice.

But, Christ, ditch this mass-o-text format, please!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 11, 2006 )

Sour Jane?
Please excuse me for not fitting with your understanding of my weak mind.

I deserved your comment in reply to mine. My comment was in retaliation for wrongs real or imagined. I miss the fun that once came with this place. With all of the controversy and conflict that has inflicted, inflected, infected this site I find myself caught up in the excitement of the controversy I claim to abhor. I may indeed possess a weak mind, but it is an open yet healthily skeptical one- or at the least I try to maintain its openness without allowing foolish ideas to rattle around amidst the marbles.

Events here lately have led me to suspect much and many I once trusted, and to question the identity?(No, that’s not the right word- the singularity of identity, which leads to a multitude of unpleasant questions and questionable identities.)

OK- My opinion (it’s about the writing)

I’m going to try some honesty here in spite of my weak mind…

I could not help but compare this to Lou Reed “Sweet Jane” etc- but I cannot claim it lacked skill. I felt that it was perhaps a tad overwrought- I’m still thinking about it- I guess that means it worked… My mind is not weak- it’s merely different- I wanted to end on a good note- I'm not sure I've struck one.

I mean that sincerely and in the best way. I look forward to a long and productive relationship of agreement/misagreement/disagreement/discordance!… or not?

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 11, 2006 )

That approaches real criticism...
...but it's still a little vague, don't you think? In what way 'overwrought'? If you can explain that, I can readily accept all the 'unskilled' pooh pellets you care to sling.

As to identity...there is only one Drake Lightle on this site...penning here under the nom de plume DeletedUser. My work is also posted as Drake_Lightle at I'm not playing games...I take full credit for everything I put out there, good bad or indifferent the response. It's all me. And I'm arrogant and conceited, so why would I hide behind an adopted persona? I wouldn't. I don't need to. I can stir up enough thought and controversy with the rawness of my own character. The truth is beautiful, even when it's ugly.

( Posted by: DeletedUser [Member] On: November 11, 2006 )


"Overwrought" - the idea of letters crawling left to right beneath by skin felt somewhat overstated, but if this is how you feel I cannot dispute it. I merely expressed my opinion of your expression. That's the best I can explain my opinion. My pooh pellets were unwarranted. My mind is not weak, although my arguments at times are indeed weak (I must not end with a preposition.)

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 11, 2006 )

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