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Her thoughts were scattered without reason.
Amazingly confused,
I had a friend for one season.
A time that I misused,
When the weather was better,
That day when I met her,

Today.
I'm freezing.

Rare disease?
Allergies?

I'm sneezing,
Disbelieving that she even
Knew my true feelings.
Left before I could reveal them.
Now.
Numb to the words I send.

Real friends?

Steel bends,

Love mends,

Tough ends.

There’s always room to pretend.

------
Adam J. Dutcher

I am...


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The following comments are for "A Cold Departure"
by AdFunk

A Cold Departure
enjoyed the quick, pithy lyricism of this piece. It's a good last line too, open to interpretation... and possibilities.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 7, 2006 )





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