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watch you lean over the loft railing,
a pale statue in the dark, tall listener
who waits for the second coming of sound.

Whatever startled you from sleep, shaped
fear as this supple thinker, does not
make my breath burn rapidly. It rather

lights the wick softly
letting awe heat the cold silence.

Pants and tee shirt echoing
shades of white, clam-shell blue --
cast you shining like Lladro

in the half-light. Perhaps, you heard
wind thumping the patio tarp
and surmised a thief. But seconds later,

you may have thought it was God
snapping his fingers against the moon.
A taut drum He uses to test

our awareness of change
in seasonal time and all the hours
we have lain together

closer now, hands latching
the intimate shadow of trust.
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The following comments are for "Suddenly Awake"
by Gwendrina

Suddenly Awake
nicely evoked/ invoked spirit/s of the moment, both real and imagined. the scene seemed so real I read it in a whisper. So many excellent images it would be hard to pick just one, but at the moment God using the moon like a taut drum is my personal favourite... and you have to love the reaffirmed intimacy of the last two lines. great stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 7, 2006 )

Thank you
Dear Auld

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this poem. Your insight and time are very much appreciated.

( Posted by: gwendrina [Member] On: November 8, 2006 )





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