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Here's a ship,
and a map to
write.

Here is sea.

Here is where
we drift,
and drift till
we dream.

Here's a ship
and a mast to
raise.

Here is wind.

Here is where
we sway,
and sway till
we spin.

Here's a ship
and a wheel to
take.

Here is sense.

Here is where
we stray,
and stray till
we're content.

Here's a ship,
and a map to
shape.

Here is sea.

Here is where
we drift,
and drift till
we dream.


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The following comments are for "Adrift"
by matt73

Adrift
Very well done. Thanks keep them coming

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

Adrift
love how each stanza builds on and builds up the last. love each tightly executed, self contained little though, each connected to an important cognition of some kind. love the lack of resolution, how we drift and dream and that's what's important. loved it full stop.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )





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