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If the moon is my mother and the stars that circle are my sisters
then my father is an absenty landlord left to fly rings around the sun
which is his lonely nature
my cries come from above
land on me and my sisters weep
i am them
with that nature that was and will always be my brothers lost to the wind
an eagle with one sun floating guard dog that lends a hand to those left overs
the have nots, the everyone wants to be but no one wants to be

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The following comments are for ""The Spirit" Part 2 (Inspired by Wanda)"
by Bran

second spirit
Bran! Always glad to read you. There's a lot of loss and loneliness here, but a feeling of scope and space too... "the have nots, the everyone wants to be but no one wants to be" and oh yes, that strikes a chord does that. nicely deeply done.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 27, 2006 )

The Spirit
Very well done and honored that my poem inspired
this, Thanks.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: October 27, 2006 )

you and Wanda come from different places in time, though this is a thought provoking read..your parents and brothers and sisters are not the same from the way she see's them, passionate yet lonely and sad, wow...
thank you for sharing..the view, insightful and very open, soft and angry..

all in all, great read!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: October 27, 2006 )

Thank you all for the comments. Wanda moved me.

( Posted by: Bran [Member] On: October 28, 2006 )

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