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So,
you're getting married.
Look at you now.

Bachelorette,
did you
perhaps
forget?

Pussycat,
wipe that smile
off your face.


You say it's your birthday
and girlfriends brought you here.
Nice friends.


Wives night out..
Gentlemen,
it's showtime!



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*All referenced claimed to be over 18 and/or under 40.



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below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

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The following comments are for "Cheaters (Uncovered)"
by Bobby7L

Cheaters
nothing here's what it's cracked up to be... might ask who's cheating who's being cheated...? wryly well-observed. intriguing choice of topic too.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

wanda/windchime/Shannon
Wanda- Thanks. Reportorial.

Lucie- This isn't about innocuous clubs you reference. This is about CFNM/Party Hardcore/CHEATERS. At these clubs, women engage in sex acts with male strippers. They are located around globe...and jammin'.

Thanks for taking time here.

Shannon- Drunk sex orgies...These guys earn their pay.

Thanks.


Bibbing in Babylon,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

Cheaters
Bobby.. your comment makes the Chippendales look very tame...
a couple of my girlfriends took me to a bar when the Chippendales were going through our town...My husband knew...and I didn't think it was a big deal...I had more fun when we went to eat after...The Chippendales showed up at the same restaurant....and to me they looked better with their clothes on...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

girls gone mild?
My research (innocent of course) reveals such sick sites (but group photos lack intimate detail) do indeed exist but mainly to feed the male propensity for visual stimulation ( "I throb harder when I see you...) as opposed to the female tendency to respond to ... I wish I knew, but the largest sex organ is the skin and the most active and important sex organ is the brain and it seems that women use their brains for feeling and rarely for thinking. Vive le difference! (See MILF)






( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

bleeper/Lucie?Kacee/soos
bleeper- Welcome to Lit, if applicable. Thanks for stopping by.

Lucie- You do not wish to research this one. soos will cover you..(Smiling)

Kacee- "Thing about da good ole days, they was da ole days." -Chris (The Wire)

Thanks for visiting..

soos- Cheatersuncovered and Partyhardcore, along w/ several other Cfnm sites, are filled w/thousands of hours of video..showing females starting off clothed and shy..but ending up in drunken orgiastic disarray...Grandmother's, wives, girlfriends...birthday girls..bachelorettes..

Reporting from field,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

girls dig bad boys but this might work for the rest of us...
I'm sure that I mis-spoke mineself...

Men respond to visual stimulation much more than women.

Women respond differently. A man must listen, and express his own feelings in response to hers- he must reveal his innermost self and his vulnerabilities, and offer his sensitivity while risking his own fragile conception of what it means to be a man... Follow this plan, guys and you have an excellent chance to get laid!

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

drsoos / Indeed
Walking dog in park works, as well.
All seriousness, aside.


RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

RWisdom
Best part of your idea of walking dog in park:

Worst case scenario- Man un-nagged in peaceful park setting with man's best friend. Worst case seems best.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 25, 2006 )

drsoos/ Of man's best friend
Steve- Tried to lighten mood a bit in previous comment. But as am sure you know, piece is of serious nature/subject.

I penned with voice of male stripper during 'party', then at end, owner of club. There is no humour in this. It is reportorial, but of course, own slant can't be helped. In own experience, was lucky. Product of solid home. Parents married, together now for over 5 decades. Did not cheat in own marriage, nor did my wife. Like I said. Fortunate. This commentary is related to a minute percent of females, am certain. Exposure in sordid detail on NET, by sites like those mentioned above gives/presents bad name/image..I wouldn't have sex with a female stripper. Am sure most women would not engage in acts w/male strippers.

Your thoughts are always appreciated. Your advice above to males is spot on.

Man's best friend remains his partner. Never underestimate talking to/with her.

Thanks to all who read. Hope it provoked thought.

RW



( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 26, 2006 )

pussy cat...
...wipe that smile off your face!!!! sweetly rude! great read...truth in it's horror is reality,
I always get a lot of your pieces.

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: October 26, 2006 )

LMJ/ Did not wish to be too
..explicit...
Wished reader to engage imagination. Perceptions influence...Transliterate...Varied takes are of interest.

Am perhaps more jaded...

Do recall 'good old days'...A seemingly more innocent time..Knowing, also, these are not those.

Your continued interest is much appreciated.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 26, 2006 )

Both funny and sad
I like the mix. We trust our partners at our peril, ever vigilant of the risks!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 26, 2006 )

Viper9 Club
5am..

Spent and sore, after demanding shift, Lex arrives home..

His lovely young wife awakes..asking, "How was your day?"...

After softly kissing her on forehead, he whispers, "Go back to sleep. I'm going to take a long hot shower."


Bibbing in Babylon,
Bobby7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 27, 2006 )

lits
I think that this poem is beyond minimalist. It is too greedy on imagery. The subjects of the poem are too dynamic and boiling with human passions to use lines like this:

“Look at you now” – there is no precedent, and no followup.

Or:

“Wipe that smile
Off your face” – ‘and do what instead?’

“Nice friends” – this is an obvious conclusion, but not risqué or revealing enough.

“Gentlemen/It's showtime” – it arrives at too a predictable moment. We are used to this intro into an interesting event. But you may have teased us with a description of an unexpected situation.

This is a nice minimalist food for thought, for the bar we call Lit.org, but it should be more artistic for what we understand as Lit.

( Posted by: teflon [Member] On: November 16, 2006 )

Teflon's POV
Teflon,
Your refreshing view is appreciated. Good to hear voice.

Porn surfers landing on hardcore party sites, once towels are lifted, view drunken orgiastic sex acts, requiring no imagination. Language of viewer matters not. No translation needed. It's partymax.

Here, intention was to understate; have viewer transliterate.

In original version, titled: ...party hardcore",
last lines read: "Wives night out gentlemen/ Time for.../, As in "Good Dog", "Before Christmas" and "To poets", last line is completed with and/or leads back to title.

Decided to change in version represented here, as voice peers out from backstage, announcing to fellow performers, "Wives night out/ Gentlemen/ It's showtime"..,having already referenced bachelorette and birthday parties.

Links above are interesting twist. Number of views continues to grow, as surfers seeking CFNM sites peep this.

One final note: Although parties start with seemingly innocuos dancing, drinking and teasing, they money-shot-climax just like classic pornos. Hence: "Pussycat/ Wipe that smile/ Off your face"

Jaded stripper/voice. Jaded reporter. Jaded voyeur...POV's..

Senryupsyched Cryptokarmacologist, reporting from manipulated locale,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 29, 2006 )

Manipulating 2500+ porn surfers
..and thanking, as well.


Cold holdin' what I got/ Hot/ Like a shaker spot..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 28, 2006 )

Unknown
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( Posted by: Vilyamhk [Member] On: December 26, 2007 )

Vilyamhk Uncovered
V,
More than a year has passed since visiting this. Appears porn surfers continue to land here. Your 'comment' seems to be only post here at Lit.

Thanks for taking time to leave clue(s) while/and of visiting.

Thanks, as well, to another crowd.

B7L

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 4, 2008 )

5,000+ porn surfers...
..manipulation/title continues to lure/intice peepers..Perhaps, appropriately ironic, what's seeked isn't always what appears, once found.


Investigative poet at large,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: November 21, 2008 )

9 Thousand Porn Surfers
..and counting..
It's been another year..

Happy Holiday Surfing!

Ciao

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 16, 2009 )





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