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Donít let your love be like the desert
Barren and in hospitable
Where there is nothing to see but

m

i

l

e

after
m i l e

of
sand

Donít let the one who inhabits your heart
Dry up in an endless quest for that oasis
Where caresses flow like water
From an underground spring
And kisses sprout like sweet dates
Plentiful from the trees.

Donít let your love be like the desert
Where a mirage does not look like what it seems.

Be happy that the Matchmaker struck you on the head
and
set you afire.



Majnuna 10/23/06



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The following comments are for "Don't Let Your Love Be Like The Desert"
by Majnuna

Don't Let Your Love
for me the last three lines were the best. but the whole is haunting, thirsting, expansive with emotion. beautiful, as always.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 24, 2006 )

The power of love...
Yes, may the lover be the oasis for their beloved! Love should feed the hunger and quench the thirst.

-ArsPoet2789ica

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: October 24, 2006 )

Camel lovin'
Ah, I've missed your work, Majnuna. An accurate unveiling of the difference between the idela of love and what is, too often, the reality. Keep reaching past that arid pretender.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: October 26, 2006 )





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