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I wrote this about 4 months ago.. i hope you all like it! remember to comment please!


Two years ago today,
you flew away.
I dont know why you went,
but I'm gonna be okay.

One things for sure,
its that I miss you right now,
but grandma oh please,
please watch over me.

You are my angel,
you have always been there.
It seems like just yesterday,
we went to church together.

I remember your pretty voice,
with the choir you sang,
me smiling up at you,
happy I came.

Grandma please watch over me,
please come when I call.
I'll need you a lot,
never let me fall.

Two years ago today,
you flew away.
Now I know you'll always be here,
watching in times of need.


------
~+stephie+~


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The following comments are for "~Watch Over Me~"
by grandmasgirl

Watch Over Me
A very sincere and genuine piece of poetry to read! Also, I like the way you use repition to gain the readers attention and get your point across. The poem is effective, because it touches an emotional core in us. Yes, it moved me to a higher placed for loving grandparents. Well, a superb write! You get high marks from me on this one. Please contiue writing this way, because it is an effective style and technique. So, keep sharing. Also, thank you for positve comments on my poem titled, "The Gift" I invite you to read more of my poetry and please a friend. Keep in touch!


FireFly747

( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: October 28, 2006 )





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