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If this music ever stops
what will I do ?
Will I stop hearing sounds
Will I stop singing too?

Where have those times gone?
When I would lie in the green
When I had that special song
With the blue over me!

Follow me....
To the beginning of our infancy
Catch me there
where we would hide and seek!

When the Sun dies down
Will I see you in our home town?
Will it be too long
Before I sing you this song?

Where will you be
If I seek you behind the moon?
Will you rest on the Poisson
Or will you just shine by the noon?

Follow me....
If you believe
That the water will shimmer
In the evening light.

Follow me...
If you want to see
There is a land
Beyond that endless Sea.




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The following comments are for "Follow Me"
by ankur440

to ankur440
There's something echanting in this simplicity. Innocence, almost, and hope, a lot of it.

It feels as if to prepare a journey into dreamlands almost..

However, just a suggestion, this poem I think could have worked better as two poems, because frankly, I don't think the beginning and end matched too well as far as theme went.

I love the last several stanzas.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: November 30, 2002 )





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