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This is the place to post your comments on the work for the Poetry Thread.

Thanks to all those who participated last time who include:

tinalouise, Dareva, Penelope, Ivordavies, windchime, Char, Peterpaulino, Viper9, Nits Kitty, Williamhill, Beatrice Boyle, JewelL, smithy, emaks, tap5000, Fairplay, JEANNIE45 and Siah.

in hope that you'll come back for this one. :-)

Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.

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The following comments are for "POETRY THREAD COMMENTS"
by londongrey

Ok Alex
I give er a try....Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 4, 2006 )

poetry thread comments
Kacee, have missed reading you lately so your poem was a grin-spreading treat to brighten an otherwise distinctly dark and dingy morning.

Alex, I had a go but it came out kind of grotty and morbid. don't know what possessed me. sorry.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 5, 2006 )

Okay, I shouldn't go to bed without anything to post, even if it should cost my life! Because you're back, and that's for good, right?

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 5, 2006 )

There, there
I just posted one, Alex! So I am not going to die after all, and you're going to stay for good.

Shannon, no need to apologize about the morbidness, I love your poem! Though this thread follows the three words glass, cotton and blue, I thought I could infuse mine with yours by writing a heart poem too. ;-)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 5, 2006 )

poetry thread comments, Peter's hearts
Honoured by the infusion, your heart lives and beats and bleeds so it balances out my cold lump of coal. Really enjoyed reading, favourite being the heart of glass, full of wine... not just 'cause I miss alcohol. honest. ;)

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 5, 2006 )

Ok Peter I took your advice and did one... I'm rusty... need a lil love to oil the penning... nice words my friends

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: October 5, 2006 )

Great Challenge
This was really inspiring; to read how differently people can interpret a set of words. I wrote one and posted before I read anybody elses -- when I read other good poems I get sidetracked and usually have trouble writing.

I hope we do this again sometime, thanks Londongrey.

I enjoyed all the poems, nauticus, for being rusty your's really did catch the wind, ...;o)


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

poetry thread comments
What a fab response!

Nitz I forgot how cheeky you can be in your poetry, I’m still trying to make up my mind whether you fancied him or just had a hankering for beer, hehe. For some reason it reminded me of the film The Village, have no idea why, but it felt a little like you were describing a different era. I think it was the ‘before I make a fool outa myself’ line. Calamity Jane? J

Auldmiseryguts I loved the imagery in your piece, from the boat to the coal. I especially liked the part about the arteries being as hard as amber, such a nice concrete image, not a nice image (because it fits with the tone) but a good image, it fits perfectly. Don’t worry about being miserable in poetry, a least its not teenage angst!!

Chinadoll I liked the image of someone picking your cotton, almost like you were a toy for them and they were unpicking your stitching to get at the wadding. Although the second half of the last line is confusing, ‘never from shall I part’.

Peter! Lol, yes I am here to stay now. I have sorted a lot of stuff out now thank god!
Produce work of such inspiration in such a short time? I love the fact you used all three words as the inspiration for each strophe. I need to keep re-reading it.

Nauticus this felt all cool and steamy at the same time. It brought up a feeling of hot sweat being evaporated by a cool breeze, or is that just me?!

BW I love poetry like this, looking back at childhood and presenting an image.

There is such a mixture of poetry here its difficult to take it all in at once. I shall have to keep rereading everything.

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

Don't put your work down, I enjoyed reading it, it adds yet another persepctive, another mind another link another discourse.

Brava! hehe

Alex xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

PT Comments
Just an old woman's fantasy about meeting a much younger man at a party...did I fancy him? You bet! To the point that I feared I would make a fool of myself (last line) I could have used swaggered through the french doors but since he was a very tall gentleman and so was the Duke...I used John it a word? I don't care is now...this fantasy of mine brought dead hormones back to life...good thing I Don't the way...I never saw The Village...was that a scary movie?
I want to commend all the other poets on their wonderful poems...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

P T Comments
Alex...I can't help it...I'm addicted to these threads....this poem is mostly real...As a child I had a security bear...I can still remember the stickiness of it...and see that one eye staring at me...and one day it did disappear ...don't remember if I got a new one...I was only three...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

faux pas
Isn't that French for f*ck up? I much enjoyed reading and writing in your thread despite my inability to follow a few simple rules.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

poetry thread comments
wow, whole crop of differently/equally beautiful insights/expressions/perspectives/styles etc... I'm with Kacee, once I start something like this I can't stop, can't help it... wanted to write this for a while but I didn't have the focus. all hail the poetry thread for giving me a kick up the creative arse.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

I came back for more, too. It is an intriguing proposition -- put three things together and make a poem. The cotton and blue, for me seem easy -- both remind me of natural scenes, sky, field, outdoors. Then glass is put there, and now it becomes metaphore, simile, alagory and all those other cool descriptives and my minds starts going backwards -- like I'm searching for my lost car keys in all the same places I've already looked.

the 2nd try -- a little different, not much.

this is really cool.


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

Poetry Thread Comment
Everybody's part is very good! This is really fun, and brings back the life here. I must commend Alex, this is his genius invention, a poetry thread of this type!

Okay, everyone... jump in and post your parts!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 6, 2006 )

Lucie, KC, Soos, Shannon, Bwoz
Oh, Geez, Alex will kill me! I posted by mistake my thread comments on the thread page, I am sorry! Nae! Bob! Viper! Please Help! Please delete my post over there!

Now, here are my comments. I hope more writers will come forward to post!

Lucie’s Blottonglass – original and comical, Blottonglass is a mini-buffet of Lucie’s inventiveness and virtuoso!

Kaycee’s Security Bear – heart-nipping, Security Bear is the very ghost of our childhood disappointments!

DrSoos’ Claireity – Clairy and clear with its message, Claireity wittily tackled the cyber-chaos that had made Claire Robinson a legend in the history of Lit.Org

Shannon’s Chelle’s Letter – bittersweet and piquant, Chelle’s letter catches the reader ‘on the cusp of kiss and dismiss(al), love and disdain’, for a minute I’m carried away by the crisp capital letter kiss, then by the following lines my own sigh gagged me.

Bwoz’s Desert Night – picturesque and sullen, Desert Night stimulates the adventurous mind, daring the drifters in us to try experiencing such scene!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

Nae, Bob, Viper Help!
Oh, Geez, Alex will kill me! I posted by mistake my thread comments on the thread page, I am sorry! Nae! Bob! Viper! Please Help! Please delete my post over there!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

PT Comments
These threads get my juices flowing...and a certain tall young man has given them a slap and tickle...

I can't believe more people haven't gotten in on is so much fun...

The poems are so great and so different...look what we have here our lit family! I love this place!! Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

poetry thread comments
Someone should shoot me now and put everyone out of my misery. I can't stop writing these. I have an addictive personality, clearly.

Loved reading these. It just serves to remind what a unique and diverse bunch the Lit. community is. I'm with Kacee, more people should join the dance. ... or I'm going to keep on and on and on and take up the whole damn thread. and no one wants that... You were warned. ;)

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

LOL @ KC & Shannon, and hey Lucie
Hahaha! Where are they anyway? Should we have a buzzer that calls each member of lit? Lucie is around, so she could still post one more!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

not bad at all for 20-liners, you've delievered swift vivid kicks of image and emotion there, frankly I'm not sure I'm up to it. I'll give it a go, but I think I'll have to bow to your superiour skill and retire from the ring for a while. we'll see...

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

Lucky Shannon and Lucie
Lucky you two, I was busy writing something to post not for the thread! :-)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

one last time for the people at the back...
that all went a bit blah. I think my creative capacity has ebbed. Ah well at least it keeps me off the streets ;)

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

Lucy and Shannon
You two are a couple of WOW(zers)...You never cease to amaze me...
Shannon...You are a dangerous person....
My stuff seems tame by comparison
Hey Wanda....Where are you?

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

I know this is to get the juices flowing but wow!!

I'm going to have spend time to go through them all!

Dareva!!!! Its so good to see you again and your writing. I hope everything is well with you and that you are feeling more on top of things. A xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

PT Comments
Glad to see you on the thread ...and to read you again...I love your Torch poems...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

That one is for you, I know you know what Buhay means, hehe.

A xx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

oh oh, blush, blush, only 20 lines, gulp!!
Gosh I am sorry gang, I didn't read the instructions properly and a poor reader, a poor writer makes, sorry.


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 7, 2006 )

Carry me away
This IS kind of fun, trying to come up with new ideas of same theme. We are a clever lot, I must say. So, I've greedily added another.


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: October 8, 2006 )

poetry thread comments
great stuff. nice to wake up to so many new posts, great inspiration with first cup of coffee, such an orginal and inventive lot you all are, bless ya. brightened my morning at any rate. Couldn't resist adding another. it done rhymed and everything.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 8, 2006 )

Alex! Poetry Thread
Thank you pal! Don't you think this thread is one of the most successful? All in all you got 24 poems posted! Congratulations! Isn't it time to close it with some comments on each post, and then start again a new one? i hope you consider that! In the next one I'll try to submit more than just one poem okay?

Luv yah, P

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 9, 2006 )

What a wonderful thing
that there is actually a thread without harshness and it is full of diversity and differences, wow, 3 words and so many thougths,

I am glad you brought this out Alex....and I agree, let's try for more!!!


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 9, 2006 )

Well I shall take Peters advice and say that it was fun but time to finish!!

Thank you so much to everyone who participated. I won't put up a new one until a weeks time, if these happen all the time it takes the fun out!!

Perhaps one of the staff would like to run a Write Off at some point?

A xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 10, 2006 )

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