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I wish I could look back on all of this
Be like the greats and recall my emotions
Calm and content, writing it all down
But I won't remove myself from the present
Wait until later when I'm fake
So while everything is changing
And nothing is becoming different
I'll type up all the minutes
Draw up all the pictures in my mind
The abstracts and the conclusions
Blocking out the white with black smudges
With the tip of my heart
Smearing itself grey and dark across the paper
Afterwords slipping out of my mouth
Prefaces turning to nothingness
The lies and falsities fall from the parchment
Dust is blown away and all that remains
Is the truth
Cold, hard and blunt as a sword
But the pain never reached your thoughts
If I could change it, would I?

------ - Alternative Indie Rock for the masses

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The following comments are for "7:23:54"
by xenosss

Powerful punches...
...being pulled here...

I really liked this piece. It was provoking, but I think what I liked most was the way it made you think, and then kind of faded out, as it got to the end, leaving you and your thoughts alone...Nice.


( Posted by: jasmine [Member] On: November 22, 2002 )

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