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Ribbon

Beautiful little ribbon
Beautiful little line
I wear your streamers and expect
A little twist and twine

Lines go on forever but
Point to point they stay
Suspended in the living red
They fly but never sway

I reveal you by your inches
Coiled inside this skin
I can't find the ending point
But I know where you begin


((I thought I was able to skip the woe-is-me phase of poetry. Guess I was wrong. Leave it to college to bring out my inner psycho.))

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I'm in a nutshell


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Ribbon
don't hold back. keep unravelling and revelling in your inner psycho (figuratively/poetically speaking) this was a vivid and rich poem, the last stanza particularly. thoughtful too, in its way, like puzzling out the ribbons, the blood, the gritty human stuff under the skin. worked fine for me. thanks for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 2, 2006 )

Toulouse-Lautrec
This felt like you were taring at one of his paintings, a poster add for the Moulin Rouge or such.

The making of a new dress for a dancing girl.

Don't mind me, I find my inner psycho isn't as 'inner' as I would like. :-)

Alex

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: October 4, 2006 )

Ribbon
Bravo, this is a masterpiece poem! I like the way you use effective imagery to express the beauty and fragilness of the ribbon. This poem radiates with love, because it is written with sincerity. This poem possesses a solid subject matter and demonstrate a superb cohesiveness. Today, I want to look upward, because there is a beautiful ribbon in the sky for love. Thank you for sharing. This lovely poem is a winner and should be published! Please stop by to read and comment on my poetry, and please tell a friend too. Okay, I am outtie!

FireFly747

( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: October 27, 2006 )





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