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Standing atop the serpents head
hot flushes and trembling his face turns red
uneasy and unsure negative thoughts fill his brain
to evaporate his confidence down the drain

not being asked to say yes unable to say no
confusion reigns as to which direction to go
wanting to break free and go his own way
the deamons around him he first must slay

Feeling inconsequential to planet earth
A man, just isnít a man without any self worth
Slowly he realises there must be better than this
As he downs the tablets, drink and slashes his wrists.

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