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could never picture you wearing white
it would seem so srange
standing there
a black thread to balance on
it seems so out of place
to remeber what i was like
to wear white
so pure and simple
a color that means so little
gets dirty so easy
a blood stain on white
shows very bright
blood on black
wont stain until it drys
id hate to see you wearing white
it would seem
like somthing simple easy to fight
but it takes over
like an addiction
white will slowly fade
to gray
never wear white black will fite
but slowly fade to gray
i can never imagen
you wearing white
i cant see it s to bright
you shouldnt need it
you probably look beter in black


------
i am a misuderstood lunatic


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The following comments are for "im back"
by schindees

im back
there's a relentless and dizzying quality to the repetitions in this piece that kind of snowball and spin. it reads like a nightmare where you only have half an idea of what's going on. it's creepy and I like it.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 30, 2006 )

this is a joke
its making fun of the gray theroy but thank you for commenting on the piece its the first time ive published on this web site since like june

( Posted by: schindees [Member] On: October 1, 2006 )

Oh, I get it. ... Wait, no I don't
forgive my ignorance (or not), and at the risk of looking like an idiot, but what is "the gray theory"? sorry. I'm thick. Still liked the poem though.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 1, 2006 )

the gray theroie
its the idea that there are two indefinate stereo types gray black gray the black is the indapendan thinkers poets artists and general idndaviduals the gray is the people who have accepted the basic human ideas media made people who have no indavidual thoughts ecept the ones givin by the music they listen to and the tv they watch they tecnicaly become a generic person there are and alwas be more grays than blacks

( Posted by: schindees [Member] On: October 1, 2006 )

Oh..
I really liked this one. Even I like to wear black than white as it becomes gray later on..Thanks for posting.

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: October 3, 2006 )





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