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Author's Note:

I will be posting a series of poem that I wrote a long time ago. Some of these I suspect I even wrote, back when I was in high school and college. I had to think many times before posting them here because I don't know anymore where they belong, or if they belong to poetry at all.

Pardon Me

Pardon me,
if I meant to cross your way
yet never let you look at me
while I was looking at you.
Pardon me,
if I had something to say,
and yet I said
"Pardon me, will you?
It's just I've nothing to!"

crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond

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The following comments are for "Pardon Me"

Pardon Me
They belong. keep them coming

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: September 27, 2006 )

Pardon Me
if "life" or "love" was a catagory, you could put them there, but poetry works well enough for me. there's a sweetness that sings through the awkwardness, nervousness, longing and regret of this encounter. it's wisful. in a good way. looking forward to more of these.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 27, 2006 )

Older Poems
Is there a word missing in the last line?

Anyway, I like this poem - it's sweet and vulnerable. A simple snapshot in light & gray.

I think it's a good idea to revisit things you wrote a long time ago. They will keep you in touch with who you really are - the true self struggling to exist.

They say that drunk people speak a certain truth; where the lubricated tongue can't hold back what's in its mind. I think most people's early poems are kind of like that because that is when one is first drunk with poetry, and even if the poems aren't that good in retrospect, they will keep you in touch with your genuine self, the self that the world continually, and quite successfully, tries to crush.

Sometimes we drift and begin to lose touch with ourselves. Revisiting older poems can help keep one grounded and in touch with one's self.

When you read one of your older poems, it is always a good idea to ask yourself, "What is it I was trying to say?" The answer can often lead to writing new poems with a fresh incite into yourself and the world.

I've been meaning to post some old poems myself but have been putting off the ordeal of going through boxes to find the one's I want.

I'd love to see some stuff you wrote in high school. Even if it ain't very good, it would be a kick.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: September 30, 2006 )

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