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You think you can get away with this
But there’s another side to the story

You think no one knows the reality
But everyone has the truth

You think there is nothing wrong
But the facts are more apparent

You think that everything will pass
But time won’t let it go

You think it can be fixed
But the repair is what is broken


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by Xlnt_1

Xlnt!!!!
So great to have you back at Lit! Hope we see a lot of you round these here parts.

Nifty poem, too. I'd remove the "more" from line six, but whatever.

Last stanza - -especially the last line -- says it all. So true.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: September 25, 2006 )

Danke...
Thanks for the comments!

Yeah, it's been too long since I posted here - but an overwhelming case of writer's block (for lack of a better term) and a heavy work load have prevented it, but things have calmed down and I'm sure I'll be posting a lot more frequently.

As for the last line - I'm not happy with it, myself. I spent a fair bit of time just letting this one sit to see if I could come up with something 'different'... I guess it serves it's purpose, in a way.

And I promise next time to watch the formatting - no question marks where apostrophes should be :)

( Posted by: Xlnt_1 [Member] On: September 25, 2006 )

Question marks?
I don't see any!

And the last two lines work -- leave them be!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: September 26, 2006 )

Hmm...
It depends on which computer I'm looking at the page on - my laptop at home shows question marks; my computer at work shows apostrophes.

( Posted by: Xlnt_1 [Member] On: September 26, 2006 )





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