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Ebony lights crawl my skin, so soft,
that I become part night, part man
and my words torn by darkness
yet my heart is held aloft.
What shade can do to man,
lazily strutting around the abyss?
What agony accompanies man;
finding its way into our corners,
cutting life from the rivers
bringing blood to the livers
and making friends foreigners,
oh what agony accompanies man?
Those ebony lights wrap across my skin
oddly, they feel warm to men,
oddly, they mirror me within,
oddly, oddly, oddly black upon skin,
What can shade do to man,
lazily strutting around the abyss?
The abyss, abyss, deep abyss of man,
a torrent that comes word and hate,
while each personification of hate
is but absence of higher love in man.
Those ebony lights slowly caress my toes,
slower, slower still, until softer than soft
yet, the darkness comes from no light,
the darkness falls from no night,
the shade that holds my heart aloft,
the ebony lights that crawl, crawl, crawl,
they come from no abyss within,
they are no mirror of wallowing sin,
they are not rivers of hate or sad flows,
they are but my heart so sad,
that in its darkness, seeks a dyad.

What shade can do to man
lazily strutting around the abyss…

*A/N I normally don't write like this, I try to adhere to a pattern that I can see immediately, but this time I experimented a little. Comments plz*

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Art is addicting, an addict am I,
truth is I, the truth am I, the truth a lie!


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The following comments are for "Ebony"
by Siah

Ebony
Very well done. Its always a pleasure to read.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: September 24, 2006 )

Championing a New Frontier!
You do well with free verse. This poem is written in a similar fashion that Walt Whitman first used when he introduced the concept of free verse. Also, I love how deep this poem is. You should write in this style again.

-Aubri

( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: September 24, 2006 )

Aubri
Walt Whitman huh? In the past I have been compared to Gibral, Blake and now Whitman :D
Thanks, I bask in the radiance of your compliments, enjoyed the write also. It was a fullfilling write.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: September 27, 2006 )

Ebony
You make my skin tingle with your words dear Siah. I definately like the free verse, you should do it again.

( Posted by: thesadpoet [Member] On: October 17, 2006 )

Thanks
As we speak I'm writing a free verse poem called Too Late.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: October 18, 2006 )

VERY GOOD...
Siah,

I like it very much! it was hot and extreme..it has a beat a spoken word feel to it..great read!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: October 20, 2006 )





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