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Jealousy runs rampant
Mystery
And betrayal
Born again
Like a Christian
Vowing for it to be different
Next time
Watching closely
From afar
Still blistered
From the burn
Brought upon
By the last battle
She comes near

Baked and bitter
Ideals
Bouncing around
Within
Unconsciously justifying
Immoral behavior
Never meant to
All intentions
Were skewed
Still confused
Guilt ridden
From striking first
He moves forward


Both are in motion
But neither
Are moving on
Placing bets
On second chances
And counting their losses
As something gained
Hints of love still linger
Making them reach out
For one another



Inches away
Sexual chemistry
Slowly mending
Broken hearts
Dare they toy with fate
And try again
Are simple wants
Worth the wait
Can she excuse
What he couldnít help
To what degree is
Change necessary


Itís a classic tale
From the book of love
And though beautifully inaccurate
Itís the only way
To tell it
It begins
And ends
When they touch



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The following comments are for "Skin"
by vince

Skin
"And though beautifully inaccurate/Itís the only way/ To tell it..." Amen to that. Another thoughtful, closely emotionally observed piece. Great.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 19, 2006 )

Vince, m'boy
I am so enjoying the work you've been posting here. Thanks so much. You write wonderfully thoughtful, empotional, reflective observations. They put me in someone else's shoes effortlessly, and lead me gently into thoughtfulness myself.

"Can she excuse
What he couldnít help"

I'd add a question mark. That's all.

It's been a pleasure to read your work each time, so far. I look forward to more.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 20, 2006 )





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