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Darkness...
Creeps in covering the bright moon in the night.
Making sure there were not a light in sight.
Darkness...
Is like a thief hiding out.
Or a sinister boxer ready for his next bout.
Darkness...
The eerie feeling of Death that waits.
Waits for the new soul that he'll about to take.

Darkness...
The blackened cloud in the sky.
The horror story that make kids cry.
Darkness...
Is like a plan that's gone wrong.
Or when you're living all alone.
Darkness...
Is the ultimate price.
When Death has taken a life.

------
Erica R. Lindsey aka Windsong [got married in '08]



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by Windsong

Windsong
Not really my cup of tea. I feel that you had an idea for the poem and its last line before you wrote it but you couldn't really make the connection between conception and connection. Also the grammar messed me up a little. Sorry, but I wasn't feeling it.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: September 16, 2006 )

Thanks.
Thanks for your honest comment. Appreciate it.

( Posted by: Windsong [Member] On: September 16, 2006 )





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