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Please forgive me

As I left you alone
Although in good company

When times where
You needed somebody else

To be hardened like stone
I thought it made strong

And to never say "I need you"
Is simply living wrong

With your shining sense of self
Independence yet to be shown

And my sympathy. Its poorly wealth,
Is well enough alone

Forgive me


------
Adam J. Dutcher

I am...


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The following comments are for "A Letter From Loneliness"
by AdFunk

Apology
Don't much get "it's poorly wealth," but I was able to soundly relate with the hardened voice of the narrator.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: September 12, 2006 )

What it's About
This one is about apathy toward poor and other so called "disposable" people. How we can just walk on by, or leave them alone...although in hindsight we sympathize their situation, still no one wants to get too close. They depend on our kindness for survival. "Poorly Wealth" is something that I made up to show money that hasn't been earned nor shared...it's inherited by family status, and it conveys also the parallel between rich and poor.

( Posted by: AdFunk [Member] On: September 12, 2006 )

Much deeper...
..than I suspected. And here I was thinking, perhaps shallowly transplanting myself into the poem (as narrator), of a person looking rather dispassionately yet with genuine regret at another who cares much for them, despite the fact that the narrator cannot bring him/herself to muster up even an ounce of meaningful emotion for that person. With just enough apathy to be untouched, but with a touch of separate compassion and empathy to know that it's unfair and wrong not to feel more for him/her/it.

I enjoyed this, both with my first reading (confusing as my opinion of it may be), and upon the second, thinking of the needs of many. I look forward to more from you.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: September 12, 2006 )





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