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your beauty
trapped beside the ugliness
trapped beside the loneliness
underneath it all
I see you cry

(I am a worm and not a man
my time, my time is in your hands)

one touch, one touch is all it takes
to make you break, I only wish
to hold you but you only seem to wish to
fly
fly away

your beauty
I cannot seem to bear
I cannot see you there
and after it all
you want to cry

(my god, my god, you've forsaken me
it's wrong, god's angels cannot bleed)

one time, one time, so heaven sent
it's meant to bring together but
I see you drift away, I say
I love you but you only wish to fly
fly away

and in the darkest night I see
an angel is all I need
something to cling to me
but you fly
fly away

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http://twothirdsleft.wordpress.com


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The following comments are for "fly away"
by JonnyT

The Return of Jonny T
Haven't seen you 'round these parts in a while, man. Nice to have you back.

Some really interesting lines in here, but I'm having trouble with the rhythm. If I could hear the music that went with it, no doubt I'd get it.

The anxious desperation is terrific.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: September 7, 2006 )

Clingy
But kind of hot, too. I'm in agreement with Viper - I'd need to hear this one for it to really work for me, but vague as the rhythm is, the meat of it is still really good.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: September 7, 2006 )





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