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I lock myself within my cell
My tomb is safe it's where I dwell
I know no highs, I fear no lows
My id is warm, my ego cold

And yet my core oh how it yearns
For something subtle not yet learned
I seek it out within my mind
An elusive shadow I cannot find

I stick my head out from my tomb
I crawl back into mother's womb
I search your words on lit dot org
I search the silence of the morgue

I cannot find just what I seek
I fear my spirit's just too meek
Maybe when it joins the whole
Maybe then at last we'll know

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The following comments are for "A Hermit"
by JackGrady

Hermit Lockdown
I like this, too, and echo windchime's comment, except for the last stanza, which kind of cops out and is a little too dreamy. I wouldn't be too quick to abandon the hermit's life, as long as you maintain your quest.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: September 7, 2006 )

Thanks for your comments Lucie and Bob. Lucie I read your epic poem about the druid kings and know that you are quite capable of rhyming and have just evolved past that as a poet. Thanks for your encouragement though. Bob just to let you know where I was coming from on that final stanza I had just finished reading Bob Callaci's masterpiece "The Tangled Tapestry" and it had me thinking about God and our relationship to him. My thought process; before the big bang all was one in perfect harmony after it parts of Gods spirit were sundered and each of us have a piece that longs to once again join the whole. Call it gravitational pull or longing to join the whole I know it's idealistic but then I must confess to being a bit of an idealistic fool.

( Posted by: JackGrady [Member] On: September 9, 2006 )

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