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Bleak, sunken skies;
Electra's brittle hands wrapped around her cup
(warm red raspberry tea)
trying to grasp her story


2:

Thick, birth-heavy skies
seen in my raspberry tea.
Quiet storm eye.

------
Stille


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The following comments are for "Storm skies and raspberry tea - a poem and a haiku"
by Dew Of Blood

Birth-heavy skies
Some very nice imagery here. Leaves my mind to wander, grasping for my own story. I'm glad you didn't tell it here. Some are better left unsaid.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: September 4, 2006 )

Dewy
I don't think I've ever read your work before, but hopefully I'll read it again.

Loved these.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 5, 2006 )





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