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Cool blue shinning nights.
Starry skies and bare feet
Splashing in a puddle of yesterdayís rain.
The children playing in the mud,
So filthy and sane
With smiles that could light the night.
Everybody is full of blood,
With skin loose enough to crawl.
Everybody is full of shit, baby.
Donít believe what the people say.
Water, rocks, and trees;
The truth God speaks
With words like sun-bleached bones.
We speak the lies
That dresses the bones
With loose, smelly meat
And discolored skin that rots beneath the sun.




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The following comments are for "Sun Bleached Bones"
by BAAL

Bones
what I like about this is the misanthropic venom that's coursing just below the surface of what might, ordinarily, be a picturesque scene. And I like the human condition summed up as speaking the lies that dress the bones, like our whole lives are fabricated with rotten words. I was in the mood for this. Cheers.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 31, 2006 )

Sunbleached
"Everybody is full of blood,
With skin loose enough to crawl.
Everybody is full of shit, baby.
Donít believe what the people say."

Lyrically reminds me of VAST, but only a little bit. At any rate, loved this one. Simmered like venom beneath pudding skin.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 31, 2006 )

So filthy and sane
is a great little line. enjoyed this one. very solid writing.

j.jd.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: September 1, 2006 )





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