Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
10

(1 votes)


RatingRated by
10Viper9

You must login to vote


"Let's hit the bars."

"Yeah. Let's look around."

The last of the recording had played, and the stereo had turned off by itself; outside, in the darkness, the snow was banked midwinter high.

"Will they be uptight?"

"I don't see why - we'll be together."

"Yeah. It's just to see what's going on."

When my wife and I returned from the store, their car was gone: it had been buried beneath the snow, and the driveway filled bumper-high. The driveway was clean now, shoveled to a pretense of April.

"He has not welcomed her to his family," I noted.

"Nor has she him to hers," my wife replied, "the baby shivers in the snow."



Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "Did you love the thought of being One?"
by johnlibertus

Fan-freakin-tastic
Perfect! What an ending. The dialogue reminds me of the Perry Bible Fellowship comics.

I can't believe how much I adored this.

"He has not welcomed her to his family," I noted.

"Nor has she him to hers," my wife replied, "the baby shivers in the snow."

Yes yes yes!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 28, 2006 )

of being One
Well, damn. I was reading and enjoying the writing and what was going on, then the ending put my mind into a state of confusion. I can't quite figure out the gist of this piece. I like it but must admit my denseness. Viper9 apparently sees something that I cannot. Either of you care to enlighten my thimble-brain?

One detail that I liked for some reason is the record player automatically shutting off.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 29, 2006 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: