At first I wasn't sure whether I liked the user of "u" instead of "you". (It's obviously deliberate)
hmmmm... Yes, I think I do like it. It's the sort of thing I don't normally like at all, but it seems to work here - I think it fits with the apathy of the peice (of the first and last lines especially), as well as the sadness. In fact, the whole poem fits together pretty well. Well done.
Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: November 17, 2002
you know i think your a female duplicate of me. i like this one alot.