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On the first of the month Time fell in love.

She was witty and wise and lovely.

On the second she went missing.

At first, Time felt dismayed; did she not love him?

But a second's reflection upon their day together set him true. Of course she loved him. Were they not made for each other?

So he searched in the alleys and the boardrooms, in the police stations and the malls, in the parking lots and the bedrooms. No sign of her.

At the end of the month her retinal pattern was discovered in a pair of eyes at the organ bank.



Interview of the Heartless Author:

What's that hanging from your ceiling?

Oh, that's my shortwave antenna.

Is it any good?

Well, there's a skyscraper on the east side of my building, it blocks the skywave from Europe. And from here on the West Coast it's 20,000 miles of skip from the west to get my BBC. So I moved to Bangkok.

We'd heard you'd shoved out a little boat, alone, into the sea

No, I live here on the wharfs, now. I'm a wharf rat.

You just sit on the dock of the bay?

No, I trade in body parts. I deal feet.




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The following comments are for "Time's Girlfriend"
by johnlibertus

weirdo
me like.

( Posted by: jscript18 [Member] On: August 26, 2006 )

How . . .
. . . I've missed your oddness.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 28, 2006 )

Retinal Pattern
This is a pretty dazzling piece and the "interview" is a surprising twist. This piece has a spiritual transcendence to it that is almost seedy, kind of like film noir. Very original.

There's two mis-spellings - are they on purpose? (warf/wharf - Bancock/Bangkok)

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 29, 2006 )

nope
Just seedy ignorance, Bob. I knew I'd misspelled 'Bangkok' the second I posted it. 'Warf' was a bonus misspelling. I'll correct them.

I dreamed the first half of this, woke up and wrote the whole thing at once. Some people talk to themselves. I finish my dreams after I wake up.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: August 29, 2006 )





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