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Posters hang on all the walls
except the hallway
where a peasant girl by Matisse
squeezes her hands tightly
yearning to touch
something cool and bittersweet.

Below her, the table hosts
our emerald passion for limes
and a bottle of Tanqueray gin.

Friday night comes again. As usual
we mix fruit with spirits
fatigue with a twist
of candlelight
and jazz with a dream
of stealing back our youth.






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The following comments are for "Limes and Gin"
by Gwendrina

Limes and Gin
very well done.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

Limes and Gin
what I liked about this is that I could really see it, and taste it and hear it... very vivid and particular time and space recreated with words. And the last stanza is fantastic.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

Live that life
I've been there -- you took me back there.
Really nicely penned poem, and short enough to be able to see it. I like that

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

Many Thanks !
Wanda

Thank you so much for the generous ratingon this poem. I appreciate your time and thoughtful consideration.

Auld
Glad you could feel the ambience and mood of this poem.I appreciate your thoughts and time taken to review it.

BW
Nice of you to drop by. Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate your impressions.

Tina
What a lovely compliment regarding my poetic writing. I appreciate your kind words and thoughtfulness very much. Thank you for stopping by.

my best to all
Wendy

( Posted by: gwendrina [Member] On: August 24, 2006 )

Emerald passion
Gwen, I've been pressed for time lately, and though I've read this a couple of times for the sheer pleasure of it, I haven't had time to comment.

This is stunning in how purely visual it is. You should be proud of this one!

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 24, 2006 )

Thank you
China Doll

so much for your kind comments. I deeply appreciate them and your thoughtful consideration. This poem is special to me, based on personal experience and one I keep bringing out now and then. Again, much appreciation for your review.

my best
Wendy

( Posted by: gwendrina [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

Limes and gin
Damn fine piece of work. The last stanza resonates with me, but maybe that's because I've been feeling pretty old these last few months. I cna relate, sadly.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: August 26, 2006 )

Many thanks!!
Penelope

Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. I am really honored you read this three times and deeply appreciate your interest in this piece.

Viper
Thank you again for stopping by to read my work. I understand how you can relate. Sometimes there is a poignant and familair peace that comes with remembrance and routine tasks that appease the hectic schedule of our aging lives.

Lucie
Your beautiful review is deeply cherished. I am touched by your kind words and can say they will help to keep me focused, hopeful and inspired. Your time and thoughtful consideration are deeply appreciated.

my best to all
Wendy

( Posted by: gwendrina [Member] On: August 28, 2006 )





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