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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond

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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "Peter Pond"
by peterpaulino

Peter Pond
liked this, made me smile, reminded me of the story of Narcissus, but told sweetlty.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 24, 2006 )

Hi There, Shannon!
Thank you very much for commenting on this, and on my other recent posts here. This one as you might have noticed, was also posted in Siah's haiku thread. Lately, my Muse visits me like a thief in the night, then I come with something little like this, which I am very thankful for. Each poem that I write these days are a gift to me from the Muse, as I have been praying for her to bring back the enthusiasm that I lost. Your comments spurred me on, though, so again thank you.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 24, 2006 )

Comrade! Intervention
Hi there Pen! REFLECTIVE: That's what I like when you comment, my dear friend, you squeeze in a word that's a key word in the piece, just makes me realize you are indeed very perceptive (I remember how you analyzed my 'Wrong Moon' poem, the embarassing side of it ;-0 and 'Last Night', how you enhanced it still with the meaning that was going on inside my mind). I will keep in mind what you said, I should resort to haiku if all else fails. Thank you very much!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

Tina and Legs!
I almost missed, thank you to the two of you, that is for the ratings of ten! Now, this could make me write ten more haiku!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

Tinalouise!
It's nice to see your comment here! Choosing the title was a hard one for this haiku, until I already exhausted my mind of what's best to put here, I've come up with Peter Pond ;-)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

peter's pond
write another 10, and then another 10, and then some more.

( Posted by: jscript18 [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

Haiku Glories
Damn fine haiku, Peter! I admire those who can write compelling haikus, cuz I sure as hell can't.

Every line is perfect, but the last says it all. Captivating work, my friend.

I'm with jscript -- how about 20 or so more?

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 26, 2006 )





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