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Kangaroos dancing on rooftops smiling
Donkeys flying backwards through the yard
You've given all but one toe to poverty
Now you're stuck balancing on the nail
Look to mountain peaks for silver
Ready a suitcase and fill it with numbers
Use the wind to hitch a ride

Don't remember to say goodbye

Ain't no shame in counting pennies
Brokeneck longhorns bring home bacon
Bloated bellies laugh at rented videos
While you crawl up the porch and tie your neighbors shoes

Oops, forgot to polish

There's a lamp in the moon
Someone forgot to pay the bill
Must have spent it on biscuits
For babies

Be generous with the gravy, youngblood



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The following comments are for "We Need Your Support"
by PeriwinkleMoses

On The Nail
Outstanding poem. Serious business told in...surrealistic bop? Very original voice you have.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 21, 2006 )

We Need Your Support
very well written and outstanding and I agree
with gomarsoap

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 22, 2006 )

beatnikish
i can really dig this poem. i could hear an echo of ginsberg lingering. it is beat man, very beat, daddio.

( Posted by: BAAL [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

outstanding
The sounds in this are awesome. I have enjoyed reading it out loud, much to the amusement of my coworkers. :)

( Posted by: feithline [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

periwinklemoses
surrealistic bop, indeed.

( Posted by: lampshadejesus [Member] On: August 24, 2006 )

serious business
Brokeneck!lamps!mountains!wind!pay the bills? what a recipe for word news paper cuts. Periwinkle Moses, you are something really special. Hahaha! The best and most subtle talent with a beat !

( Posted by: MountainBill [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

William S Burroughs
What a cute name. I like your poetry. I like unique abstractness and surrealism in writing and art. You've put it together in a very cool way. It definitely has a bounce and beat that gets right in side the heard. It reminds me just a little bit of the William S Burroughs cut up technique and dada exquisite corpse genre- experiments in writing.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 25, 2006 )

Bunsen Burner
gomarsoap, wanda, feithline- picket fence on a steeple hat

BAAL- bongos banged me back on this one

lampshadejesus- I'm sorry, I have no idea what you just said.

MountainBill, Legs, windchime- agreed, candlelit babies cry do over gallons of spilled bread

Demeter- Shmickledenficklefack?

( Posted by: PeriwinkleMoses [Member] On: August 30, 2006 )





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