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My figure leans against the garden wall
absorbing the breath
of jasmine and lilies.

Here, I leave my body
restful, letting the sun
sculpt her shadow
while I, spirit,
stirred from half light, half space,
enter the tea house
and begin writing.

This morning, other women too
will perform an act
of separation --
dark laundry from pale,
egg whites from yolk

or like myself,
muse from the traditional mold
of home maker and wife.

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The following comments are for "While Meditating"
by Gwendrina

I very much liked the image of sunlight sculpting shadows. Nice wordplay in this one and calmly paced - well done.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 17, 2006 )

What a cool poem
Such a calm, fascinating, reflective vibe here. Appropriate, given the title. I enjoyed this.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: August 17, 2006 )

While Meditating
well done. thanks for posting

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 18, 2006 )

Thank you!
China Doll

Thank you for stopping by to read this poem. I truly appreciate your astute and gracious comment.

I really appreciate the fine rating you have given this poem. You are very kind and I thank you for taking hte time to read and reveiw this one.

Your observation is right on target. I love your analysis of my poem's theme. Thanks so much for reviewing and commenting.

Your kind remarks are deeply appreciated. Thanks for reading.

my best to all

( Posted by: gwendrina [Member] On: August 18, 2006 )

This was truly beautiful! What a terrific read it is - the wife and mother in me certainly related. Thank you!

( Posted by: The demure 1 [Member] On: August 18, 2006 )

Thank you
Hi Demure,

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this poem. I am glad you could relate and really appreciate your thoughful considertation.

take care

( Posted by: Gwendrina [Member] On: August 19, 2006 )

As always, Gwendrina, you paint a perfectly lovely, accessible picture.

( Posted by: feithline [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

Good poem. I like the contrast of the metaphysical and the everyday. Contrast of light and shadow, the tea house and writing, suggestive of ritual. Then the everyday rituals of separating laundry and eggs. Very well done.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 23, 2006 )

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