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You draw the line in the sand
showing me there are limits to what we can be
but I call in the waves and
watch the tide roll in and
wash it away.
What is meant to be will be,
except for us.
I pray for our memories to fade
and yet they haunt themselves
back into existence.
Whether I want it or not
there’s no room to forget.
Mirrors won’t lie
I see your image wrapped around me.
I wipe at the fog but who we’ve been remains.
Try as I might these barriers I just can’t conquer.
Tears recount our history,
each drop worth every agony,
puddles won’t drown out our world,
so I cry till it breaks me and makes me true.


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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Meant to be"
by nae411

Oh, Nae...
This was especially heart-wrenching. I've been struggling for a while to get something off my chest and out of my head, but I think your poem here has done that for me.

You draw the line in the sand
showing me there are limits to what we can be
but I call in the waves and
watch the tide roll in and
wash it away.

Tears recount our history,
each drop worth every agony,
puddles won’t drown out our world,
so I cry till it breaks me and makes me true.


Thank you so much for this, Nae. Less passionate and sexy than your usual posts, but this one stands out all on it's own. Honest, beautiful, sad but accepting.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Nae
Why does this sound like an illicit love affair to me...Him drawing a line in the sand ...telling her where she stands...she wants more but it will never be...Could he be married? she can't get the picture of them together out of her mind even when she tries to wipe out that picture in the steamy bathroom mirror...she is left to cry ...and another mistress bites the dust...What I read into it..another heartbreak for the used woman...but did she ever give a thought for his wife? enjoyed the read...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Chinadoll and Kacee
Chinadoll, thank you for your comment. Sometimes things just come out and you're not quite sure where they come from.

Kacee, yes I guess it does sound that way, LOL. Or maybe the other way around. Luckily I have been married for 21 years and to date hubby hasn't cheated on me, well that I know of ;0). Just things that make you go hmm...

Thanks for reading me.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Kacee one more thing...
This here is the original I posted this morning but then replaced with the one on top, maybe it makes more sense, or less. I have both versions posted at the WF's. People seem to like this version better:

Draw the line in the sand
watch the tide roll in and
wash it away.
What is meant to be will be.

Pray for memories to fade
and yet they haunt themselves
back into existence for
there’s no room to forget.

Mirrors won’t lie,
images wrap around us,
don’t wipe at the fog, traces of who we’ve been remain.
These barriers need to be conquered.

Tears recount our history,
each drop worth every agony,
puddles won’t drown out the world,
so cry till it breaks you and makes you true.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Nae
I like the one on lit better....Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Right as rain...
Renae-
Another voice, always pleasing...There are several here which find singular. Yours is one.

Enjoyed experience..Though universal, read as fresh.

Pleasant dreams,
Bobby



( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Nae's mirror
'I cry till it breaks me and makes me true"

You only wrote it once, but it seems like a refrain, almost like the echo of that line preceded itself, only in other, dense thoughts.

Your poetic voice is blooming full, you give us such sharp images to imagine.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 17, 2006 )

Touching...
Nae,
Right you are....
Candid lines as you've said: "Mirrors won’t lie
I see your image wrapped around me."
Amazing feelings filled me; simply nice.
Regards,
Myth.

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: August 19, 2006 )

Do so miss your talents..
..here on Lit. Are you going to come back and dazzle us all soon?

I had forgotten about this poem, but upon re-read, my heart went through an altogether familiar wrenching. Lasting and timeless. We need more from you.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: September 12, 2006 )

China doll, Myth, Bwoz, Lucie and Bobby7L
Thank you guys for stopping by and reading! So glad this made some sense to you.

Chinadoll, thank you sweetie. I haven't written much lately, seems like everything is stuck in the vault! Hugs, Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 12, 2006 )





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