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Dear you,

Here is a letter
but it isnt a b or c
or even x o x o
(were not playing
tic-tac-toe)
written in pencil
except
the hearts are in ink
its black w/ white
beneath like
a box with a bow
tied around
my heart as I find
notes to you (from me)
tucked away
in books, lost
or maybe its found
on a dusty shelf
that would make you
sneeze if only
you were here
but (dot dot dot)

With(out) love,
me




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The following comments are for "Dear You..."
by EllieFrechette

Wordplay
COol wordplay here. Not my cup of soup but interesting still.

( Posted by: Siah [Member] On: August 17, 2006 )

Dear You
I agree with Siah that it's not really my cup of tea, but... there really is some fascinating word play here. It also reminds me of moving. I move an awful lot, and each time I do, I find myself wasting a few hours of the process tucked away in a maze of boxes, completely absorbed in a cache of notebooks that I completely forgot existed. How our hearts change over the years!

So, although it's not a '10' in my opinion, I'm still really glad you posted this one. Great effort and all in all, it was a very entertaining read.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 18, 2006 )

Dear You
I also like the word play. keep on writing

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 18, 2006 )





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