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She’s kissing that man now
and he can barely taste the salt
on her lips from her last snack,
a little bit like him
but you’re watching her
and you know, yes, you know
you turned the sugar bitter
as it burns at your heart

and she’s kissing that man
with his hands on her hips
shoving her up against the wall
when you only pushed her down
and she’s looking past him
as if it’s just another chore
but you’re looking without eyes

as she’s kissing that man
whispering those non-words
underneath her breath, that tastes
like she swallowed the ocean
without regard for the starfish
plucked from the relentless sky
because you turned the sweet sour
when you left, just watching
as she’s kissing that man now
and more.



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The following comments are for "Salt"
by EllieFrechette

Salt
Nicely done.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 19, 2006 )

Salt
I very much enjoyed this.

whispering those non-words
underneath her breath, that tastes
like she swallowed the ocean
without regard for the starfish

How great is that?

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 20, 2006 )

123
Stretch your teeth before you rest. Welcome home muscle tone.

( Posted by: PeriwinkleMoses [Member] On: August 21, 2006 )





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