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Toes dangling in
warm invitation,
a mere few inches
between reflection
and unfathomable depth.

I don't dare, though
minnows dart between my ankles,
nibble at my toes.

I know, I know
it's cold down there.
No idea how I know.

Sitting here for days,
weeks on the edge of
earth wound.
The water's fine
says wavering face.

I don't believe her. Stay.
Wait for faith or
someone to stumble
and push me in.

F. Stuart
August 2006

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The following comments are for "Baptism"
by feithline

well done. thanks for posting

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )

"Sitting here for days/ weeks on the edge of/earth wound." is my favourite. Teetering on the brink of belief. There's a tension and doubt that's nicely evoked by particular and ordinary details, the dangling toes and the darting minnows. The water's fine but it feels like a precipice. Know that feeling. Could be a metaphor for so many other situations too.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )

Thank You Both
It's nice to have my poem read and understood so well. Your comments were especially appreciated Auld! It's amazing to know that the metaphor was received.

While this isn't about religious faith, per se, it is about faith, and I'm glad it read to you the way it did.

( Posted by: feithline [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )

I like this poem and the picture it makes - speaking to one's wavering face on the surface of the depths and the "spiritual" choice one must make - whether to jump or wait to be pushed. Of course, you know you will have to jump of your own volition - waiting for a push, you may end up sitting there forever, mocked by the minnows.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )

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