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A monster with flat teeth
Which gives out roaring sounds,
As if it hungered for something
But it could not reach.

Heavy like a ton of bricks
It rarely ever moves,
Its steps like a thunder
Reaching everyone's ears.

But the thing which scares
Is not the sound or teeth,
But the mere shape and size
Which make it look so gentle.

But with the right man
Who will tame this wild beast
Wonderful works of art and knowledge
Will come forth on sheets of white.

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Writes 24 Hours a day, 7 days a week. As long as he gets his free can of Coke.


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The following comments are for "The Typewriter"
by WriterX

The Typewriter
I liked the concept behind this and I like the idea that keys roar as if hungry. But myself, I always imagine something darker, more insatiable, sinister. My typewriter is a big black scarab that gives me gothic nightmares. It was nice to see another side, to see the beast tamed. An interesting read.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 14, 2006 )

Maybe because I'm in a literal mood
Reminded me of Burroughs' "Naked Lunch". Cool idea.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: August 14, 2006 )

The Typewriter, WriterX
Awesome poem, but you should of been more coy with the title.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 14, 2006 )

Typewriter as Monster
I like what you've started here, but I don't think it's finished. The last stanza 'tells' too much. We know you're talking about a typewriter due to the title. We don't need the reminder at the end that we're talking about writing. Keep this tighter by removing that obvious reference. Replace it with further personification of the machine. Bring a deus ex machina feel to it, and you've got one kick butt poem.

Go, you! Good work. :)

( Posted by: feithline [Member] On: August 14, 2006 )

Bob Hope
Right now cracker jack! Choicey premium!

( Posted by: PeriwinkleMoses [Member] On: August 16, 2006 )

Personified
I like the abstract personification, if the "monster" is something of human nature. A very unique simile that feeds us all -- can we tame our own monster?

very good

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 17, 2006 )





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