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ENDANGERED SPECIE





Survival of the fittest.
It doesn't matter
who's right or wrong.
Go ask the Dodo bird.


Go ask your neighbors
in Nagasaki & Hiroshima.


Go ask your child's
stuffed toy.


Go ask the dead
in the cemetery
& ask them
if they wanted it this way?


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The following comments are for "Endangered Specie"
by gomarsoap

Endangered Specie
yes. true.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

Endangered Specie
How true. Very well done.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

Gomar's "Specie"
"fittest" -I think that judgement call is why everything is so f**ked up.

concise. I liked the harshness of the bombing followed by the softness of a child's bear. brings the point in effortlessly.
nice job.

best to you-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

Endangered
I liked the weary, exhausted and all around fed-up feel of this poem. Very nice work.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

Specie comments
Thanks all for commenting.

Sounds like this one was kind of hit or miss?

Pen: You may query more than just the dead. But if the dead could speak - truely speak - I think we'd get quite an earful.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

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Really bold reading, not really "in your face" but it is "in your back yard" and "In your home".

This poem is like the tip of the iceberg; if one is a believer (religiously), then the dead are constant consultants to the living. If one is not a religious person then of course there are no easy answers.

I see this as a kind of middle ground, and like you say Bob, either it hits or it misses. With me, neither, it is still going on.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )

endanger
Enjoyed your poem very much-all I could think about is that it doesn't really f**cking matter. What's going to happen; is going to happen, we have no control (although most of the time I'd like to think I do).

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: August 13, 2006 )





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