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breathe life out of me
in silence words build
look blankly through the window
draw secret signs
that will soon fade away

possess my warmth
let legs dangle over water
envelop heart and soul
overwhelmed by palisaded woods
closing inside

heave my sigh
in sweat-drenched
soul-burdening hiking excursions
but stand beside and feel
sublime above deepness
tree-clothed and sun-bathed

mullard ducks, swan dung
lying beside misty pond
and walk with wind
breathing through me
tender-loving

find comfort in feeling
forgetting people among me
searching through them
seeping in
like childlike love


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The following comments are for "eyes closed"
by tkal317

Spirit of Frost . . .
. . . is alive and well at Lit these days. I'm really enjoying these peaceful summertime poems peopel have been posting. Yours is one of the best.

One minor crit: it should be "mallard," I think, not "mullard". As a frequent typoist, I'm keenly sensitive to these matters unless I'm at fault.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 10, 2006 )

eyes closed
Third stanza is my favourite, there's something immensely satisfying about the lines "let legs dangle over water" not sure what it is, but I liked it. But then I liked a lot of lines in this. Conjured beautifully the companiable silences of summer days. Wish I was there

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 10, 2006 )





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