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Actions in Life

By Chris Wood


Sitting.

Acting calm and committed.

Thinking.

Will the future bring or take.

Talking.

Aching for a sympathetic ear.

Praying.

The definition of hope and optimism.

Crying.

Private wishes that never came true.

Lying.

Done to protect those we mean not to hurt.

Loving.

That which makes each one of us an explorer into the unknown.

Working.

Makes us feel like we belong and are important.

Dying

Starts as soon as we are born.

Living.

Not caring.

~

My first attempt at any sort of poem, so go easy :)



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by chris wood

Well, I liked it...
I thought it was pretty good, especially for a first attempt. The great thing about poetry is that there isn't a pre-defined form for it; a jumble of thoughts can make as good a poem as one which tells a story - the real key is whether it catches the readers' attention, and you managed to catch mine with this one.
I agree with Jessica that there's a few bits that could use polishing, but I'm not going to make a big point of that because I thought that generally it hangs together pretty well.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: November 9, 2002 )

I like
I liked the way you formatted your poem, with a single word, and then a thought on it following. I've never seen it writen like that before, and I thought it was great. From the sounds of it, your poetry will only get better and better.
~Neurotic Kukakeness~

( Posted by: NeurotickupkakE [Member] On: May 1, 2004 )

re: actions in life
Didn't particularly care for it. Sorry man, but it reads like classroom notes ...

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: May 1, 2004 )





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