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I am back for the poetry.....

Numb smiles and cold rain
during Louisiana's
own trademark season
number three, in which I thought
too much and too small
Now for you dear, a numb smile
as we sit, sipping
coffee across the table
our conversation
casual without tension
Always for you, a numb smile

Mad monkey fling poo!

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The following comments are for "Numb Smiles"
by SingChi

Numb Smiles
welcome back to the poetry SingChi. Favourite lines are the first five, 'specially "too much and too small". Think most folks can identify with that.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 8, 2006 )

coldly ever after
the majority of smiles are numb, like they are frozen on their dead-eyed faces. do you really have to be cold too? e tu brute? cold, even in louisiana where we sweat all day?
speaking of, i live here in louisiana and i would like to know what our trademark season is.

( Posted by: BAAL [Member] On: August 8, 2006 )

To Baal,..........
The third season after New Year is Summer. Do you remember how hot it was last year? Or in August!? In the 100s everyday it seemed!! It's not that much better in the northern half of the state tho.

And smiles aren't always numb. Let's say you are having a great time for one full month, everytime you smile, you mean it. Or if you are in love, you're just generally happy and everytime you smile you totally mean it. Some people can tell because there's something that radiates from a person in love who is smiling.

And I am cold to the person mentioned in this poem because I can't be happy around him. Around him, the only colors I feel are black and dark blue-ish colors. If you met a girl and the same thing happened to you, you might say the same. If you haven't already. But I think you are older than me and know more of the world.

Oh, and don't melt this summer.

( Posted by: SingChi [Member] On: August 8, 2006 )

Haha! I love the love, peace and chicken grease!

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 11, 2006 )

Hey, it's been a long time. I got to say, you seem so much more sofisticated. I am impressed. I like the poem as well as Identify with it.I am thinking of trying my hand at poetry again. Hope you had a good summer, it was HOT. Anyway, see you later. Your favorite pothead. peace.

( Posted by: crackpotpoet [Member] On: August 11, 2006 )

to legs
haha, funny aint it? It's something an old friend used to say, he still does, but I haven't heard from him. It'd just like a trademark for him.

( Posted by: SingChi [Member] On: August 12, 2006 )

here it comes!!!
*gives crackpotpoet the double finger*

( Posted by: thenightcalls [Member] On: November 4, 2006 )

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