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My thoughts canít escape the prison of my teeth
So I paint pictures of what I want to say with tears
And hum songs with heavy sighs.

I spell out what I want to say with my eyes
Describe the desires I have with my fingertips
And punctuate the fears with my fists.



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The following comments are for "Can't Say What I Want"
by Majnuna

Can't Say
I'd be embarrassed to say to you how much I like this poem.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 6, 2006 )

thanks?
*scratches head*.... is that a good thing or bad thing?

( Posted by: majnuna [Member] On: August 6, 2006 )

A Good Thing
I meant it as a compliment - a big compliment. It's funny though, when I first read this piece it had an erotic impact upon me. Therefore, my discrete and clumsy comment.

Reading the poem tonight, it has more layers for me. For one, it's an exquisite picture of longing, seductively written.

I think I'm getting tongue-tied, so I will now defer to the first line of your poem.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 6, 2006 )

oooh
---both pretty and painful. Skillfully done!

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: August 6, 2006 )

Say what you want
Exceptionally beautiful!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

You're good
I hope you compete in the newly resurrected Write Off soon. Excellent work.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Really good.
It seems to me that you are very talented.
layered and subtle...yet blunt. a hard thing to do.

( Posted by: Wally 5 [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Can't Say What I Want
"And hum songs with heavy sighs.", "And punctuate the fears with my fists." You say it better than I ever could, this feeling. Beautiful, truthful piece. Lost for words.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Awesome..
I just can't even say how much I liked this poem. It goes beyond words.. Thanks for posting.

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Incredible
For a moment there, I thought you were writing about me.

This is short and not a single word was meaningless. Sometimes, less is better. This says it all and then some.

Incredible.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

can't say what i want
You have captured my mind and heart. I'm in love. Gomarsoap may be too embarrassed to say it, but I'm not. But I must warn you, I am a poetry love polygamist.

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: August 9, 2006 )

can't say what i want
Multitudes will glimpse your soul my lovely Queen of Prose and their passions oh so deep like sand beneath your feet.

( Posted by: JackGrady [Member] On: August 9, 2006 )





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