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i wish i was something
to somebody.
i couldn't be anything
to anyone.
i'm a monster,
but i'm not in your closet.
i'm a disease
with no cure known.
i trace a couple lines
where no one will look.
i brace myself for the crash.
it hurts deeper this time.
maybe i should stop
and take a second look,
but the blood's already flowing,
so i close my eyes.
i wish i was something
to somebody.
i wish i had something;
maybe someone.
i'm a monster,
but i'm not under your bed.
i'm a disease
with symptoms unknown.
it hasn't been a minute,
and i'm feeling empty
even though it's all
still surrounding me.
i'm still wishing
i had somebody here.
maybe they would come
to try and stop me.
i draw a couple lines
where no one will look.
i brace myself for the crash.
it hurts deeper this time.
maybe i should stop
and take a second look,
but the blood's already flowing,
so i close my eyes.


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The following comments are for "Somebody"
by Veruca Salt

Frightening.
I can't help but worry now...
The poem is strong; I'd pay to read it. The rythm is short, but it is not repetitive enough to allow the reader to relax. It's as if the reader is being forced to take in every harrowing detail. As always, the emotions are powerful and effective. Good poem, but the content seriously worries me...

( Posted by: The Recycled Avatar [Member] On: December 19, 2002 )





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