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I remember
the implacable sweetness of
armfuls of sunflowers and jasmine-
the same afternoon
I adored
the smell of juniper grass
and painted flowers
on your naked feet.

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The following comments are for "As soon as you come to mind"
by Shakti

Just cool. Tells a day's story in a smattering of words. Nicely done.

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

Like it!!!
very good, it is short, I agree with viper, a lot of story in a little package.

Its also ( I think ) kind of quiet and contented, it gives off this feeling.

really good.

( Posted by: Wally 5 [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

It tells more in small. I liked this one.

( Posted by: G.S.VASUKUMAR [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

There's something so sweet and tender here that it made my heart swell with warm and contented feelings.

You're turning me into a sap, stop it. ;)

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

apparently I was trying to log in when I was already logged in. that or I'm just secretly in love with myself. muwaha!

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 7, 2006 )

thanks guys...
thanks for the nice comments...have a great day...

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: August 15, 2006 )

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