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PAINTING





I don't mind painting
especially the walls
though it's a little bit tedious
cutting in
around doors & windows.


Ceilings are easy
though more strenuous
& your face
gets spotted with paint
& they seem to take forever.


All that endless space.


Like driving across Nebraska.


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The following comments are for "PAINTING"
by gomarsoap

ash/wind/pen
Thanks for the comment-o's.

windchime - sorry you didn't care for it. I had just finished painting the ceiling in a large room, wrote this little poem, and posted it. Got caught up in the immediacy of it, I guess.

I didn't mean for it to be any prize-winner, but kind of like it because it's about an ordinary and utilitarian subject.

There is an alternative ending:

It's like painting the sky,
or at the very least,
driving across Nebraska.

Decided to go with the minimal.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 2, 2006 )

Painting
I have worn my fair share of white paint freckles in the past. I found this poem extremely agreeable and comfortable to settle into.

Next time, cut through Nebraska, so to speak, and rent a sprayer. ;)

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 2, 2006 )

Paint
The caps titles make your poems hard to miss. I'm glad. I know I probably overlook reading a lot of good poetry like this, but unfortunately, I do not have the time to look at every single poem or story that is listed. I wish I did have more time.

I like this poem. I like little poems like this that tell a short story or make a brief statement, giving me a glimpse into the writer's day to day world. I think these are the best kind of poems.

( Posted by: Legs [Member] On: August 2, 2006 )

Never ends
Nebraska never ends, by the time you reach the stateline your car needs new tires...

I like it. I'd changed title though, to Painting Nebraska...maybe not???

But it does relate two things that most of us probably don't like, Painting and driving across Nebraska.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: August 2, 2006 )

china/legs/BWOz
chinadoll & legs: Thanks. For some reason, I'm surprised you'd both like this kind of little poem. I seriously thought about a spray gun but have never used one. I'm painting the entire interior of a house but thought you'd have to get tarps and mask off windows and doors because of overspray, etc. Also, kind of on a tight budget.

I've been capitalizing poem titles for years. Just force of habit - not trying to get attention.

BWOz: I split a gut when I read your comment about the tires.

I'm not too crazy about the title either. It was one of those "emergency" titles.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

The loneliness of the long-distance painter
Actually, I like painting. I think I'd like crossing Nebraska, too. That's just me. I also like this poem, though I can see Windchime's point, and I too prefer the alternative ending. Somehow I imagine you sitting down on a paint-can, speckled and tired with a dusty coffee, musing this out on a piece of spattered newsprint. Nice.

( Posted by: MobiusSoul [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

Clean Ceilings
I like Brian's comment about the tires... was the ceiling that tedious? At least it is clean now. I need to paint mine, but will put it off.
Thanks for reason for further procrastination-
Elizabeth
p.s. I liked this. It was minimal, and suited the task-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: August 4, 2006 )

painting
I like this one I began to smile brought back alot memories of painting and painting fights thanks for posting

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 11, 2006 )





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