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Alone in a room of sleep.
I alone lay in a rectangle,
twisting and turning

Quiet now,
don't shake that
take all your words
and bundle them into
the pit of your stomach

on a whim,
think about young girls
or men

everything can
come from

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The following comments are for "Silent Night"
by Bran

Silent Night
Fantastic lines here, "I alone lay in a rectangle/ twisting and turning" and "take all your words/ and bundle them into/ the pit of your stomach". There's something starkly, bleakly brilliant here. Loved it.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

Long live Imagism!
Imagism is alive once again! Ezra Pound, T. S. Eliot, Marianne Moore, and Archibald MacLeish, (just to name a few) I believe, would be as pleased with this poem as I am. Great job; keep it up!


( Posted by: ArsPoet2789ica [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

Silent Night
Great wording really like this one.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

Silent night
Being a bit long winded, I am always amazed when someone can take 50 words or less and blow me away.

There's something about this poem. I just can't wrap words around it.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

Thanks for the love ya'll.

( Posted by: Bran [Member] On: August 3, 2006 )

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