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he opens his eyes
a new day
she opens her eyes
a new day
he hopes
it'll change
become better
she hopes
it'll change
become better
he leaves
a field of black
thats suddenly ends
into a field of white
thats is where
his world ends
and her world begins
she leaves
a field of white
that suddenly ends
into a field of black
this is where
her world ends
and his world begins
they see each other
and pretends each other
is invisible
he falls back
she falls back
his alarm clock
goes off
her alarm clock
goes off
they walk out the door
to see
not black
not white
but a field of green
as far as
the eye can see
their eye's meet
and before time
they are there
there hands about to touch
and he wakes up
and she wakes up
and realizes
it was just a dream

i am a misuderstood lunatic

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