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dancing to a silent beat
I look half crazed
demented
running through an invisible maze
if I had bitch written boldly on my forehead
would you still be so damn amazed
but wait before you get scared and runaway
look again
do I really look like your mother fucking slave
tilt back your head and swallow
glassy eyed and dazed
cause your heart is too cold
to handle this intense heat wave


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The following comments are for "HOT FIRE"
by Deeha

Nasty
In the best way. I'm not sure which interpretation that came to my mind is most appropriate: perverted or murderous? Perhaps neither.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: July 22, 2006 )





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