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He is warming up to me,
Getting his nose out of his shell,
And his mouth, cautiously:
What if the nice rosy smell
Is just a trap?

Hes getting more confident
Seeing Im willing to stay
Out there,
Waiting,
My soul naked
All in the open
For him
To give it a try.




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The following comments are for "Shy"
by Thea

fabulous
Excellent portrayel of fear and paranoia in this poem. You def. do a great job expressing your fear of vulnerabilty and it works quite nicely.


Hes getting more confident
Seeing Im willing to stay
Out there

great lines. Excellent job

( Posted by: Essence [Member] On: July 23, 2006 )

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Nice

( Posted by: Bran [Member] On: July 24, 2006 )

shy
i have to agree with fabulous. very well done.

( Posted by: wanda [Member] On: July 24, 2006 )





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