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please indulge me as I slide,
let loose this pressure..
manipulate me in ways that make me tingle.
right now this is heaven.
but later I'll be devastated

I'll tear myself limb from limb.
let loose my tears and apologies.
Watch me cut myself wide open,
beg for chances,
that ran dry long before tonight..

Hating myself,
it doesnt quite do the job.
I find my self, giving in, falling short.
letting loose,
killing your love, darling.
Holding.. tightly to a parasite,
a vile thing, that echos I love you.

Don't worry dear..
I'll show you the world.
the world I've built instantly around you,
A place without parasites,
and mistakes..

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The following comments are for "let loose"

Love it
I really like this poem. Each word you have chosen, you have put them together to convey emotion. The ending left me intrigued and yet pondering. Nice work.

( Posted by: Sparx [Member] On: July 19, 2006 )

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